This is a rewrite I'm doing of a very, very old (I'm talking late 90's) Sailor Moon fan season, Sailor Moon X. Sailor Moon X and its related fan season, Sailor Moon E, were actually pretty popular back in the early days of the internet. While I loved Sailor Moon X as a kid, the writing... has not aged well, to put it lightly.
Since the project is over 20 years old and was abandoned around the year 2000, I don't think anyone will care if I rewrite it. It's something that holds a lot of sentimental, nostalgic value to me, and I'm not doing this out of malice but instead out of fondness.
You can read the original Sailor Moon X series here. It was meant to take place after the Makaiju arc. I plan on rewriting episodes 1-14 (or rather 1-15.) For some reason, my personal files of the fanfic (which I've had forever) have an extra episode missing from the site, and I know for sure I didn't write it.
I'm writing this as a script, it's the easiest and fastest way for me to get something out. If you see any continuity/canon errors in my rewrite, please let me know and I'll fix it. I haven't watched the anime in a while, and Sailor Moon R is the season I'm least familiar with.
[Rewrite] Sailor Moon X Episode 1: Dark Force Rising
[SCENE: A bright, sunny day. Some scenery shots of happy people in the park, kids playing, couples strolling. Usagi and Mamoru walk together, holding hands, smiling and looking slightly bashful. They reach a large pond in the park, and stand in the center of a large bridge arching over it, looking over the sparkling water.]
Usagi: It's so peaceful... After fighting the Dark Kingdom and then the Makaiju, I'd almost forgotten what this felt like. Everything's been changing so fast!
Mamoru: It has, but it's nice to be able to slow down now and enjoy life.
Usagi: Yeah... and I'm glad I'm able to enjoy it with you...
[Usagi looks at Mamoru starry-eyed. She stands on her toes and Mamoru bends over, and they share a tender kiss as the wind gently blows]
[OPENING CREDITS]
[SCENE: A dark, underground chamber. Lanterns eerily light the space from the walls. In the center is a raised pool of black water. Six ill-defined silhouettes kneel around the pool, seemingly deep in meditation, waiting for something. Steam begins to rise from the water, and it takes on a vaguely humanoid form with glowing eyes. The steams glows a dim red, and above his eyes are two horns. One of the figures sitting around the pool rises and steps closer. Illuminated by the steam, he appears to be wearing something akin to a ninja's outfit, but in red. His entire body is covered, none of his face is visible.]
Akai-oni (red ninja/Oni Master): Lord Hades, it is an honor to be summoned by you once more. For centuries, we of the Oni Clan have awaited a sign from you.
Hades: My faithful servants, after eons of slumber, the time is ripe for my resurrection. I require energy for my new body, and I have never seen such a surge of it among the humans before. Oni Master! With the power I have granted you, I entrust you will collect this energy.
Akai-oni: I would be honored, my lord.
Hades: Keep in mind, though... only pure, positive energy will suffice. Choose your targets wisely.
Akai-oni: Understood.
[Akai-oni leaves the chamber.]
Hades: The rest of you, prepare the energy chamber. There is no time to waste!
[SCENE: Rei's room at the temple. Everyone except Usagi sits around the table, waiting for her to show up. Minako is reading a Sailor V manga, and Ami is studying.]
Rei: Ugh, Usagi is late again! She's so irresponsible... how long could a date possibly take?! We really need to discuss what we're going to do now that the Makaiju's defeated.
Minako (offhandedly): We could become private detectives and stop the Yakuza...
Makoto: That sounds scary... I'd rather face the Dark Kingdom again. Hey wait, isn't that a plotline from the Sailor V manga?
[Minako looks sheepish and gives a goofy smile]
Ami: I don't think we need to worry about fighting right now, things seem pretty calm. I wouldn't worry too much, Rei.
Rei: Still, it's always good to be vigilant.
Ami: That's true, but it won't be hard to be vigilant and focus on our studies at the same time.
Minako: I don't want to study! We just got done fighting the Makaiju, I need a break!
[SCENE: Usagi and Mamoru are at the edge of the park, Usagi has a balloon, some flowers, and a snack. There's an ice cream cart nearby on the sidewalk.]
Usagi: Mamo-chan, you're so sweet!
[Usagi looks very pleased and squishes the flower bouquet to her chest like it was a teddy bear.]
Mamoru: (slightly flustered) A-ah, I'm glad you like them.
[Usagi sees the ice cream cart and gasps. She puts on a sweet, pouty puppy-dog face and looks up at Mamoru.]
Usagi: Maaaaaamo-chan~?
Mamoru: Ha ha, okay, okay. I'll get you an ice cream.
Usagi: Yaaaay! Thank you, Mamo-chan!
[Hidden in the branches of a large tree nearby is Akai-oni, watching Usagi and Mamoru]
Akai-oni: What a sweet couple... and what a generous lover he is! A perfect target.
[SCENE: In Rei's room, Minako and Makoto are sitting on the floor, playing a Sailor V video game. Ami is lying on the floor studying, and Rei has been sitting at the table reading and drinking tea. She looks annoyed.]
Rei: She's not coming at all, is she? I swear, we need to put that girl on a leash and drag her here.
Ami: Normally you'd be right, but... can't we go easy on her this time? We're not fighting anyone, and it's been hard for Usagi to spend time with Mamoru up until now.
Rei: (sighs) Yeah, you're right... I'm just frustrated. She said she'd be here, and we've been waiting all afternoon.
[Minako has won the Sailor V game, and Makoto has an utterly defeated expression. Minako turns around to face Rei.]
Minako: Let's just forget about the meeting for today, we all deserve a break. Anyone want to go window shopping?
Makoto: As long as it's not a rematch...
Rei: Well, why not, it's not we're doing anything important here.
[They get up to leave and Minako has to half-drag Ami out.]
Ami: W-wait! I only have two more questions to answer, and I'll be four chapters ahead!
[SCENE: Usagi and Mamoru are walking down the sidewalk, Usagi still holding the flowers and balloon, but the snack and ice cream are gone. Motoki is walking towards them and waves hello.]
Motoki: Hey, Usagi! Mamoru! How are you guys doing?
Usagi: Just great! We were out on a date!
[Mamoru looks really flustered, but Motoki doesn't skip a beat.]
Motoki: Really? That's great! You're a lucky guy, Mamoru! (winks)
Mamoru: (sheepish) Y-yeah...
Motoki: I'm headed back to the arcade, do you two want to come along?
Usagi: Yeah, that sounds fun!
Mamoru: Ah! I just remembered. Usagi, don't you have to meet Rei and the others today?
[Usagi looks absolutely mortified]
Usagi: I... uh... forgot all about that!
[Usagi starts to panic and grabs Mamoru's hand, yanking him along the way]
Usagi: Rei's gonna be soooooo mad at me!! She's gonna yell at me and scold me and... (ranting fades into the distance as she high-tails it)
Motoki: A-ah... okay, see you later then...
[Just after Usagi, Mamoru, and Motoki leave, Rei and the other turn a corner and end up on the same sidewalk.]
Makoto: Where should we go first?
Minako: Oh! How about we get some ice cream, and then go to the arcade!
Rei: Sounds good to me.
Makoto: As long as I don't have to play against Minako again...
[SCENE: Usagi and Mamoru are at the temple, and Yuichiro is sweeping the walkways. Hiding behind a tree is Akai-oni.]
Akai-oni (from hiding place): I need to get them alone... it's important not to attract attention if I can help it.
Usagi: (panting from running) Where's Rei?!
Yuichiro: Oh, she's not here right now. Everyone left a while ago... Rei looked really annoyed.
Usagi: I'm... I'm dead...
Yuichiro: (chuckles nervously) Well, you can wait here for Rei if you'd like.
Usagi: (looking defeated) O-okay...
Yuichiro: Well, uh, let me know if you need anything.
[Yuichiro awkwardly walks off to sweep elsewhere]
Akai-oni (from hiding place): Finally, now's my chance!
[COMMERCIAL BREAK]
[SCENE: Rei and the girls arrive at the arcade. Motoki is there and comes over to greet them.]
Motoki: Hi everyone! That must've been a fast meeting!
Minako: How'd you know about our meeting today?
Motoki: Ah! I ran into Usagi and Mamoru today, they said they had to run to a meeting with you guys.
Rei: What?! NOW she decides to go to the meeting? I swear... Come on, she's probably waiting at the temple.
Ami: I did say we should keep studying...
[SCENE: Usagi and Mamoru are waiting at the temple]
Usagi: I do feel bad for missing the meeting... I just really wanted a break...
Mamoru: I'm sure if you explain it to Rei she'll understand. Just try to not to make it a habit.
[Mamoru feels uneasy, like someone is watching them. He looks around but sees no one.]
Usagi: Mamo-chan...?
Mamoru: Someone's here.
Usagi. What-?
[Suddenly, Akai-oni jumps from the roof of the shrine, landing in front of Mamoru. He does a sweeping kick under Mamoru's ankle that causes him to fall.]
Usagi: Mamoru!!
[Usagi runs to Mamoru, but Akai-oni throws a small bomb at her, throwing her back into the nearby trees. Mamoru quickly jumps to his feet and runs at Akai-oni, but Akai-oni dodges him and uses Mamoru's own weight to push him to the ground.]
Mamoru: Who are you?!
[Akai-oni doesn't answer, but pulls out a long knife, but with a glowing, translucent blade. He walks towards Mamoru, preparing to strike. Watching from horror in the trees, Usagi gets to her feet and shouts "Moon Crystal Power, Make Up!"]
[Transformation Sequence]
[Akai-oni is about the sink the blade into Mamoru, but looks up as he suddenly hears Sailor Moon's voice.]
Sailor Moon: Stop right there! Ruining a young couple's afternoon stroll! Attacking an innocent, handsome stranger! And in a temple, no less? I'm Sailor Moon, and in the name of the moon, I'll punish you!
Akai-oni: A pretty speech, but no one gets in my way and lives!
[Akai-oni spins around, throwing multiple mini-bombs as Sailor Moon attempts to dodge them, yelling in fright. Smoke fills the air, temporarily blinding both Akai-oni and Sailor Moon. As it starts to clear, Akai-oni notices Mamoru is gone.]
Akai-oni: Eh? Where'd he go?
[A rose shoots through the air, landing at his feet. He looks surprised. From the roof of the shrine stands Tuxedo Mask.]
Tuxedo Mask: Those who tarnish sacred places and sacred love are not worthy of either.
Akai-oni: Pfft. My target got away, thanks to you two. Have fun playing with my familiar, Moriyami!
[Akai-oni vanishes in a puff of smoke, and is replaced by a red, feminine demon with leaves for hair and branches for horns. Sticking out of her skin are spike-like branches.]
Sailor Moon: What... what is that?!
[The monster lets out a guttural cry and charges at Sailor Moon, shooting out spike-branches from its arm towards her. She dodges them clumsily, until the monster's spikes catch on her skirt and pin her to a tree. The monster charges at her, and grips her throat, pinning it to the tree. Tuxedo Mask hits the monster from behind with his cane, and it's temporarily distracted, turning around and facing him, preparing to attack.]
Sailor Mars: Fire Soul!
[The fire hits the demon, causing it to scream in agony. Sailor Mars and the other senshi have finally arrived, and Sailor Mercury immediately goes to free Sailor Moon.]
Sailor Mercury: Are you okay?!
Sailor Moon: Yeah!
[The monster, realizing Sailor Moon is free now, is about to charge back toward her, but Sailor Jupiter attacks.]
Sailor Jupiter: Supreme Thunder!
Sailor Venus: Now, Sailor Moon!
Sailor Moon: Right! Moon Princess Halation!
[The monster is dusted, and everyone breathes a sigh of relief. After a moment, Sailor Mars realizes how much damage was done to the temple.]
Sailor Mars: Ahhh! The temple's half destroyed! This'll take forever to fix...
[Sailor Moon has a concerned look on her face, and seems to be staring into the distance.]
[SCENE: Nighttime, at Usagi's house. Her room is dark, and she's in bed, looking at the moon through the window.]
Usagi: Hey, Luna...
Luna: Hmm?
Usagi: Do you think we'll... ever truly be at peace?
Luna: It's hard to say, Usagi. But fighting is part of being a Sailor Senshi. Someone has to protect everyone, and that someone is you.
Usagi: Yeah... I DO want to protect them. I WILL protect them. Everyone I love...
Luna: We'll try to learn more about this new enemy tomorrow. For now, you should get some rest.
Usagi: (smiling softly) Goodnight, Luna. And thanks.
[END CREDITS]
Since the project is over 20 years old and was abandoned around the year 2000, I don't think anyone will care if I rewrite it. It's something that holds a lot of sentimental, nostalgic value to me, and I'm not doing this out of malice but instead out of fondness.
You can read the original Sailor Moon X series here. It was meant to take place after the Makaiju arc. I plan on rewriting episodes 1-14 (or rather 1-15.) For some reason, my personal files of the fanfic (which I've had forever) have an extra episode missing from the site, and I know for sure I didn't write it.
I'm writing this as a script, it's the easiest and fastest way for me to get something out. If you see any continuity/canon errors in my rewrite, please let me know and I'll fix it. I haven't watched the anime in a while, and Sailor Moon R is the season I'm least familiar with.
[Rewrite] Sailor Moon X Episode 1: Dark Force Rising
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[SCENE: A bright, sunny day. Some scenery shots of happy people in the park, kids playing, couples strolling. Usagi and Mamoru walk together, holding hands, smiling and looking slightly bashful. They reach a large pond in the park, and stand in the center of a large bridge arching over it, looking over the sparkling water.]
Usagi: It's so peaceful... After fighting the Dark Kingdom and then the Makaiju, I'd almost forgotten what this felt like. Everything's been changing so fast!
Mamoru: It has, but it's nice to be able to slow down now and enjoy life.
Usagi: Yeah... and I'm glad I'm able to enjoy it with you...
[Usagi looks at Mamoru starry-eyed. She stands on her toes and Mamoru bends over, and they share a tender kiss as the wind gently blows]
[OPENING CREDITS]
[SCENE: A dark, underground chamber. Lanterns eerily light the space from the walls. In the center is a raised pool of black water. Six ill-defined silhouettes kneel around the pool, seemingly deep in meditation, waiting for something. Steam begins to rise from the water, and it takes on a vaguely humanoid form with glowing eyes. The steams glows a dim red, and above his eyes are two horns. One of the figures sitting around the pool rises and steps closer. Illuminated by the steam, he appears to be wearing something akin to a ninja's outfit, but in red. His entire body is covered, none of his face is visible.]
Akai-oni (red ninja/Oni Master): Lord Hades, it is an honor to be summoned by you once more. For centuries, we of the Oni Clan have awaited a sign from you.
Hades: My faithful servants, after eons of slumber, the time is ripe for my resurrection. I require energy for my new body, and I have never seen such a surge of it among the humans before. Oni Master! With the power I have granted you, I entrust you will collect this energy.
Akai-oni: I would be honored, my lord.
Hades: Keep in mind, though... only pure, positive energy will suffice. Choose your targets wisely.
Akai-oni: Understood.
[Akai-oni leaves the chamber.]
Hades: The rest of you, prepare the energy chamber. There is no time to waste!
[SCENE: Rei's room at the temple. Everyone except Usagi sits around the table, waiting for her to show up. Minako is reading a Sailor V manga, and Ami is studying.]
Rei: Ugh, Usagi is late again! She's so irresponsible... how long could a date possibly take?! We really need to discuss what we're going to do now that the Makaiju's defeated.
Minako (offhandedly): We could become private detectives and stop the Yakuza...
Makoto: That sounds scary... I'd rather face the Dark Kingdom again. Hey wait, isn't that a plotline from the Sailor V manga?
[Minako looks sheepish and gives a goofy smile]
Ami: I don't think we need to worry about fighting right now, things seem pretty calm. I wouldn't worry too much, Rei.
Rei: Still, it's always good to be vigilant.
Ami: That's true, but it won't be hard to be vigilant and focus on our studies at the same time.
Minako: I don't want to study! We just got done fighting the Makaiju, I need a break!
[SCENE: Usagi and Mamoru are at the edge of the park, Usagi has a balloon, some flowers, and a snack. There's an ice cream cart nearby on the sidewalk.]
Usagi: Mamo-chan, you're so sweet!
[Usagi looks very pleased and squishes the flower bouquet to her chest like it was a teddy bear.]
Mamoru: (slightly flustered) A-ah, I'm glad you like them.
[Usagi sees the ice cream cart and gasps. She puts on a sweet, pouty puppy-dog face and looks up at Mamoru.]
Usagi: Maaaaaamo-chan~?
Mamoru: Ha ha, okay, okay. I'll get you an ice cream.
Usagi: Yaaaay! Thank you, Mamo-chan!
[Hidden in the branches of a large tree nearby is Akai-oni, watching Usagi and Mamoru]
Akai-oni: What a sweet couple... and what a generous lover he is! A perfect target.
[SCENE: In Rei's room, Minako and Makoto are sitting on the floor, playing a Sailor V video game. Ami is lying on the floor studying, and Rei has been sitting at the table reading and drinking tea. She looks annoyed.]
Rei: She's not coming at all, is she? I swear, we need to put that girl on a leash and drag her here.
Ami: Normally you'd be right, but... can't we go easy on her this time? We're not fighting anyone, and it's been hard for Usagi to spend time with Mamoru up until now.
Rei: (sighs) Yeah, you're right... I'm just frustrated. She said she'd be here, and we've been waiting all afternoon.
[Minako has won the Sailor V game, and Makoto has an utterly defeated expression. Minako turns around to face Rei.]
Minako: Let's just forget about the meeting for today, we all deserve a break. Anyone want to go window shopping?
Makoto: As long as it's not a rematch...
Rei: Well, why not, it's not we're doing anything important here.
[They get up to leave and Minako has to half-drag Ami out.]
Ami: W-wait! I only have two more questions to answer, and I'll be four chapters ahead!
[SCENE: Usagi and Mamoru are walking down the sidewalk, Usagi still holding the flowers and balloon, but the snack and ice cream are gone. Motoki is walking towards them and waves hello.]
Motoki: Hey, Usagi! Mamoru! How are you guys doing?
Usagi: Just great! We were out on a date!
[Mamoru looks really flustered, but Motoki doesn't skip a beat.]
Motoki: Really? That's great! You're a lucky guy, Mamoru! (winks)
Mamoru: (sheepish) Y-yeah...
Motoki: I'm headed back to the arcade, do you two want to come along?
Usagi: Yeah, that sounds fun!
Mamoru: Ah! I just remembered. Usagi, don't you have to meet Rei and the others today?
[Usagi looks absolutely mortified]
Usagi: I... uh... forgot all about that!
[Usagi starts to panic and grabs Mamoru's hand, yanking him along the way]
Usagi: Rei's gonna be soooooo mad at me!! She's gonna yell at me and scold me and... (ranting fades into the distance as she high-tails it)
Motoki: A-ah... okay, see you later then...
[Just after Usagi, Mamoru, and Motoki leave, Rei and the other turn a corner and end up on the same sidewalk.]
Makoto: Where should we go first?
Minako: Oh! How about we get some ice cream, and then go to the arcade!
Rei: Sounds good to me.
Makoto: As long as I don't have to play against Minako again...
[SCENE: Usagi and Mamoru are at the temple, and Yuichiro is sweeping the walkways. Hiding behind a tree is Akai-oni.]
Akai-oni (from hiding place): I need to get them alone... it's important not to attract attention if I can help it.
Usagi: (panting from running) Where's Rei?!
Yuichiro: Oh, she's not here right now. Everyone left a while ago... Rei looked really annoyed.
Usagi: I'm... I'm dead...
Yuichiro: (chuckles nervously) Well, you can wait here for Rei if you'd like.
Usagi: (looking defeated) O-okay...
Yuichiro: Well, uh, let me know if you need anything.
[Yuichiro awkwardly walks off to sweep elsewhere]
Akai-oni (from hiding place): Finally, now's my chance!
[COMMERCIAL BREAK]
[SCENE: Rei and the girls arrive at the arcade. Motoki is there and comes over to greet them.]
Motoki: Hi everyone! That must've been a fast meeting!
Minako: How'd you know about our meeting today?
Motoki: Ah! I ran into Usagi and Mamoru today, they said they had to run to a meeting with you guys.
Rei: What?! NOW she decides to go to the meeting? I swear... Come on, she's probably waiting at the temple.
Ami: I did say we should keep studying...
[SCENE: Usagi and Mamoru are waiting at the temple]
Usagi: I do feel bad for missing the meeting... I just really wanted a break...
Mamoru: I'm sure if you explain it to Rei she'll understand. Just try to not to make it a habit.
[Mamoru feels uneasy, like someone is watching them. He looks around but sees no one.]
Usagi: Mamo-chan...?
Mamoru: Someone's here.
Usagi. What-?
[Suddenly, Akai-oni jumps from the roof of the shrine, landing in front of Mamoru. He does a sweeping kick under Mamoru's ankle that causes him to fall.]
Usagi: Mamoru!!
[Usagi runs to Mamoru, but Akai-oni throws a small bomb at her, throwing her back into the nearby trees. Mamoru quickly jumps to his feet and runs at Akai-oni, but Akai-oni dodges him and uses Mamoru's own weight to push him to the ground.]
Mamoru: Who are you?!
[Akai-oni doesn't answer, but pulls out a long knife, but with a glowing, translucent blade. He walks towards Mamoru, preparing to strike. Watching from horror in the trees, Usagi gets to her feet and shouts "Moon Crystal Power, Make Up!"]
[Transformation Sequence]
[Akai-oni is about the sink the blade into Mamoru, but looks up as he suddenly hears Sailor Moon's voice.]
Sailor Moon: Stop right there! Ruining a young couple's afternoon stroll! Attacking an innocent, handsome stranger! And in a temple, no less? I'm Sailor Moon, and in the name of the moon, I'll punish you!
Akai-oni: A pretty speech, but no one gets in my way and lives!
[Akai-oni spins around, throwing multiple mini-bombs as Sailor Moon attempts to dodge them, yelling in fright. Smoke fills the air, temporarily blinding both Akai-oni and Sailor Moon. As it starts to clear, Akai-oni notices Mamoru is gone.]
Akai-oni: Eh? Where'd he go?
[A rose shoots through the air, landing at his feet. He looks surprised. From the roof of the shrine stands Tuxedo Mask.]
Tuxedo Mask: Those who tarnish sacred places and sacred love are not worthy of either.
Akai-oni: Pfft. My target got away, thanks to you two. Have fun playing with my familiar, Moriyami!
[Akai-oni vanishes in a puff of smoke, and is replaced by a red, feminine demon with leaves for hair and branches for horns. Sticking out of her skin are spike-like branches.]
Sailor Moon: What... what is that?!
[The monster lets out a guttural cry and charges at Sailor Moon, shooting out spike-branches from its arm towards her. She dodges them clumsily, until the monster's spikes catch on her skirt and pin her to a tree. The monster charges at her, and grips her throat, pinning it to the tree. Tuxedo Mask hits the monster from behind with his cane, and it's temporarily distracted, turning around and facing him, preparing to attack.]
Sailor Mars: Fire Soul!
[The fire hits the demon, causing it to scream in agony. Sailor Mars and the other senshi have finally arrived, and Sailor Mercury immediately goes to free Sailor Moon.]
Sailor Mercury: Are you okay?!
Sailor Moon: Yeah!
[The monster, realizing Sailor Moon is free now, is about to charge back toward her, but Sailor Jupiter attacks.]
Sailor Jupiter: Supreme Thunder!
Sailor Venus: Now, Sailor Moon!
Sailor Moon: Right! Moon Princess Halation!
[The monster is dusted, and everyone breathes a sigh of relief. After a moment, Sailor Mars realizes how much damage was done to the temple.]
Sailor Mars: Ahhh! The temple's half destroyed! This'll take forever to fix...
[Sailor Moon has a concerned look on her face, and seems to be staring into the distance.]
[SCENE: Nighttime, at Usagi's house. Her room is dark, and she's in bed, looking at the moon through the window.]
Usagi: Hey, Luna...
Luna: Hmm?
Usagi: Do you think we'll... ever truly be at peace?
Luna: It's hard to say, Usagi. But fighting is part of being a Sailor Senshi. Someone has to protect everyone, and that someone is you.
Usagi: Yeah... I DO want to protect them. I WILL protect them. Everyone I love...
Luna: We'll try to learn more about this new enemy tomorrow. For now, you should get some rest.
Usagi: (smiling softly) Goodnight, Luna. And thanks.
[END CREDITS]
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